In class we read Thirst, our task was to make up our own ending to our story

I think I have done the following well because I used interesting words

Something I still need to work on is the 2A sentence

Dad shouted once more. His voice rumbled through the trees, scattering the birds that have been perched at the cans quenching their thirst. Ryder heard his voice. What shall I do? He wondered. Then he ran threw the dust with the hose, cleaning all his mess up so there were no evidence to be seen, in the corner of his eyes there was a shadow coming towards him but who’s. ‘’ Ryder!’’ his face palily and his eyes like a waterfall. He hid in his spot were he always hid when he was getting a hiding!. ‘’ Ryder you disgrace show your self’’ his voice-based like a gunshot. He was right on top of him. Terrified, Ryder shivered in the corner of his hideout.q

 

Snaping the wood of his underground entrance, dust impacting his eyes then a big hit smashed his arm emerging him from his hideout. ‘’Let me go!’’  he demanded, trying to run away. He took off Like a headless chicken zeg zagging through the crunchy field.  ‘’ Ryder! What were you thinking’’ dad yelled with veins popping out of his neck. Ryder's eyelids opened wider as his stomach sank, It just that we have nothing and i was just looking out for the family. ‘’ That sill unacceptable I could of lost my job because of your stupid act then we would of had nothing’’, ‘’ so take a quarter of the water back now !’’ but what about the rest of the water. ‘’ leave it for us the carter want know he grinded’’. Well emptying the quarter the water splashed out punching me in the gut, roling up the hose water pored down his legs like bald. The job was done  ‘’ Dad said this stay between me and you ok’’.

Entering the door Dad changed from nice to mad ‘’ why son just why. The more I look at you the more upset I come ’’ said mum. ‘’ He is going straight to his room’’. Days later no one found out and they went back to normal then the carters came over and the AQUA-PLEX drove up the 

driveway. Hello’’ said Mrs carter we come to give you some water. The operator climbed out of the transporter and walked round to the back. She tapped at the tablet in his hand. A hydraulic arm emerged from the transporter's side and field up their tank.  Tears rolled down their eyes, Thank you we all appreciate it.