Cort the rip

 I have been learning to use show not tell to make my narrative interesting

To do this I have tried to have to describe what the characters think and feel. This is a story I changed with my bro.

The Rip                                              

   

There were two brothers who were not at all alike; they were different in every way. The younger brother stayed on the sand and the older brother was always in the water. The older brother liked to swim with his bros, diving, tumbling, bombing, snorkeling, and surfing in the waves. During the day the older brother liked to go on lots of action adventures but the younger brother would stay safe on the sand. Sometimes the older brother would creep up on the

 younger brother and drag him into the water. “Oh come on you little chicken, it’s only waves,” teased the older brother.

One morning their mother got angry with them,“ like a cat and a mouse!” out you go together,’’ she said, and try to be nice to each other just for once’, Jack is out swimming bombing and having fun while James is playing on the sand. jack tells James to come out for a swim because it is hot. James looks at the waves and thinks there to big for him to handle. ‘’James get in to hear you little baby or I will drag you in’’ said Jack‘’James said no I will not leave this sandbank’’.Jack goes out too far then he gets caught in a rip and gets pulled out over 50 meters away from shore.

 

His brother waited for him to come back from the water. Fear gripped his heart tears tethering to burst from his eyes. Knowing his brother might not come back James jumps in the water to go follow jack, knowing there were jellyfish, stingrays, and sharks but he was determent to save or see where his brother is. As James was swimming out to jack, he saw a fin behind jack. James started to yell’’ shark! Shark! Behind you’’ swim to me, Jack said’’ you swim to me the current is too strong’’.OK! Then he swims to him and they swim together slow and steady knowing there was a shark behind them. They made it to the sandbank thanking James for saving him.

They ran through the sand, down the road, and through the door. When they reached home, their mom was washing the dishes.’’ Hello,’’ she said, ’’ you two seem very quiet.‘’ is everything alright?’’ Jack smiled at his brother. James smiled back.                          

Clean your water

 In class, we have been reading an article based on the water we have been learning about reciprocal reading and the different types are prediction, clarification, questions/ answers, and summary.  

I think the hardest job is summarizing because you have to rewrite what you have read. 

How long will you live?

 In class, we have been learning about health. Health can be mentally and physically in all different ways.

 In class, we do a 'Cold Task' to find out what we already know. Our cold task was on narrative writing. This is a snapshot of what I did in 30 minis by myself.

We are learning to self-assess our writing so we know what we are good at and what we need to work on.

what I want to improve on in my writing is having figurative language ( simile, metaphor, idiom, assonance, alliteration personification

The pig ridding       

One day me and the boys when out on the farm and rid of the pigpen. Were stered at them for a while thinking what would happen to us if we tested them so we all jumped in and watched Kash trying to rid them. Then the unexpected happened Kash got bummed! 3 feet up in the air he was winded.

     

The pigs were angry they rubbed there noses in the dirt and charged like a bull and bumped me off my feet, and the others flew up onto the fens. We made a trap for the pigs. Jared dropped on top and ride it like there was no tomorrow, slapping it but making it do a wheelie and fell in pig poo. 

 Then we gave them a rest and left to the cowshed to have some cow milk.

Water Cycle

In class, we are learning about the water cycle and all the different types of the hydrologic cycle. 

Embracing Forgiveness

 In class, we have been learning about forgiveness, we read about a man and his Tarore getting killed by a man and they asked for forgiveness.